Dark Star

"back to hell"...this verse is directed to the "devil" that is mentioned earlier. its saying that i wont do this so go back to where you came from kindda deal. ...

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Just a little different I walk a little different I talk a little funny My eyes aren’t very straight My teeth look like a bunny I don’t have many friends ...

White Lines Is it worth it? Now? Tomorrow? Thoughts of question flow. As a river of fear makes the nerves quiver with a rush of desire. The devil himself, cheers ...

nice work! the message in the poem is clear and the sense of hesitation and fear is strong. sure the rhyming was a bit inconsistant but it was the power ...

loved it!!! just amazing and so...POWERFUL!! the words flow and just all together they create an instant peice of art! the writting and words are so intense and just get ...

great poem. nice, easy but powerful and full of imagery. one can feel different emotions while reading this peice. its light reading for the light hearted and free spirited. it ...

its a good start. as said above it could be more developed. but for what you have right now it is very good. it flows pretty well and gives strong ...

AWESOME!!! i loved it!! this was a really great peice of work. the emottion and feeling that one gets from reading it was amazing. some ppl may not appriciate a ...

wow....really full of emotion. one can really feel the intensity of it all. the little bit of ryming in there really added to the effect! awesome poem!! loved it!

no its all good..this is the thing i am looking really helps and its even better when ppl can be honest about it...ill review the article and re work the ...

im not sure id i got this in the right catagory but w/e Black Hearts, Dark Shadows Evil lurks Hairs on end Temptation smirks Courage pretends Angry shadows Back seas ...

i really loved this poem...the rhyming was awesome and the whole idea was great. sure its a story told many times over but it just doesnt seem to get old ...

alright..ill keep that in mind..thanx!!

i really enjoyed your poem a tone..you could have added a bit more intensity and agression. as Snoink was saying, you backed off a little but its all gud...awesome wording ...